last mohican

Um...what the bloody heck? :?: :shock:

An interesting concept...but consitant with the theme all the way. I liked it, but it reminded me of "One is the lonliest number..."(don't worry, not in a plagerizing way). It ...

Your poem had good imagery and flow. The darker mood you created was practically tangible. I really liked it. ~LM

Interesting images and ideas. I thought it was well written and you obviously put thought and effort into each word. I really liked it, but I'm curious to know what ...

Dark, but it reminded me of "Lady of Shalott." I liked that it was unrhymed. ~LM

Great visuals and good form. I liked it.~LM

You're welcome. Keep on writing, you'll only ever improve. ~LM

Noted and applied. Thank you for the suggestions, they really helped :) ~LM P.S. Tyre is a weird coincidence... :?

I have to disagree, I'm afraid. I thought the poem was clever and was something that we all have to slog through, the sometimes overwhelming monotony of life. Loved it! ...

Keep in mind that I am not John Cleese, Michal Palin, Grahm Chapman, Terry Jones, or Terry Gilliam, just a fan and that this wasn't supposed to be the definative ...

I really love the existencial theme of your piece. Deep, very deep. *finger snap applaus* *finger snap applaus* ~LM

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Noted and applied. Thanks :)

Great poem. Using writing as a metaphore for love was a nice touch. My favorite part was the end, the end of the relationship symbolized in forgetting which hand they ...

Deep. Very deep. I think we all have those lonely tree days. It had good form and was very moving. Great job.